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--- blockade_runner_logfile [2011/06/17 05:22] – hagalaz
+++ blockade_runner_logfile [2011/08/12 04:18] (current) – hagalaz
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-[//Note: This is taken from the ship's log of the ACS Grace Hopper, a Coalition Palieros-class gunship pinnace assigned to the Epiphyte Interdiction Zone.  It is a very rough example of space combat conducted using ''**vehiclepose**'' emotes for ship movements. As I was the only live player present on the Hopper, the dialogue isn't exactly verbose. - Hagalaz//]
+[//Note: This is taken from the ship's log of the ACS Grace Hopper, a Coalition Palieros-class gunship corvette assigned to the Epiphyte Interdiction Zone.  It is a very, very, very rough example of space combat conducted using ''**vehiclepose**'' emotes for ship movements. As I was the only live player present on the Hopper, the dialogue isn't exactly verbose, and I have added certain embellishments in the form of dialogue between myself and an 'imaginary' bridge team.  All paragraphs prepended with //''Viewer:''// are actual ''**vehiclepose**'' emotes, shown as they would've appeared to all participants AND anyone who might have been in the same part of space as the ships involved. - Hagalaz//]
 ''Viewer: Lyons Den flies up from the Epiphyte landing strip.  The vessel moves slowly after it attains orbit, and it engines begin to glow as it prepares to navigate away.''
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 ''COM-3 (ANON @ Lyons Den) >> Un*static*mply. Engines overpo*static*tain safe distance.''
-''Viewer: Lyons Den still sits unmoving in orbit. Her engines at obviously overpowered''
+''Viewer: Lyons Den still sits unmoving in orbit. Her engines are obviously overpowered''
 Hagalaz glances at his display, looking at the glowing icon representing Lyons Den.  "In the event that Lyons Den isn't lying... Helm, slow our approach.  Fire control, maintain weapons lock."
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 ''COM-3 (Hagalaz @ Hopper) >> Lyons Den, this is the Coalition warship Hopper.  Stop you engines and abandon ship, I intend to sink you.''
-[//Note: Yes, I really DID say 'sink'. Some nautical traditions, while silly, remain to this day. - H//]
+[//Note: Yes, I really DID say 'sink'. Some nautical terminology, while silly-sounding, is still used by space navies - especially those steeped in traditions going back to days when they were terrestrial wet navies. - H.//]
 He pauses, turning to address the Furies, speaking into his headset.
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 Hagalaz pounds his fist into his seat's armrest.  "Helm, lay in a speed course for the jumpgate and engage!"
-The helmsman speaks up. "Aye sir.  Plotting course. Engines are coming online... course has been plotted...  en route to sector 509 by 223 by -30... ETA is two minutes, ten seconds.
+The helmsman speaks up. "Aye sir.  Plotting course. Engines are coming online... course has been plotted...  en route to sector 509 by 223 by -30... ETA is two minutes, ten seconds."
 The Hopper surges along, attempting a speed course for the jumpgate instead of merely trying to pursue the Lyons Den.  After a brief wait, the helmsman speaks up.
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 ''Viewer: Hopper Fires one last parting shot, scoring a hit on one of Lyons Den's engines.''
-"Perkele!  Helm, all stop!  Fire control, cease fire."
+Hagalaz roars, "Perkele!"  He then clears his throat before continuing,  "Helm, all stop!  Fire control, cease fire."
 ''Viewer: Hopper 's navigation thrusters fire, bringing her to a stop to one side of the jumpgate.''